Question: Hi, for those who have already seen the start of my tome, then sorry for posting again but I've added a lot more. I'm 17 and I just consideration I'd have a go. So, what do you think? I'm an open-minded person so constructive valuation is of course welcome.
Here goes,
Answer: Your editorial style is quite good- it's not too heavy and it's easy to gather and follow.
Watch your pacing though: you've revealed a lot in a short extent of time here, try to set up your story more slowly- maybe mention 'looking peculiar' but wait until later to explain
| Apr 02, 2011