PLEASE what do you think of this short excerpt? Thank you!?
Question: Honest to any more ... the story she reads a bit like foreshadowing of the main story of my book ... comments on the count and pleease feedback! :)
Girls lying on his stomach, his chin resting on hands, eyes widened with things to do.
Answer: It was captivating until I got to the last paragraph - "the towel draping a blanket over trembling girls' ...? My memory girls slept. Why do they shiver? And what is "the handkerchief of coverage?







