I have improved my short story?
Question: OI have improved on my lack of reading the story in my previous question to see the story first, then look at it.
Misunderstand. Cassie Jones
This is the story of how I became "Miss" Cassie Jones.
Answer: It is healthy, but a little too fast.
The case with the father is weird and I do not see how it is connected to the rest of the story ...
The behavior of your character is not natural at times.









